the bar chart below shows the ten countries for the production and consumption of electracity in 2014

the bar chart below shows the ten countries for the production and consumption of electracity in 2014
The bar chart presents information about the amount of electricity produced and consumed by the world’s ten energy user countries in 2014.
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it is clear that
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China and the US consumed and produced more electricity than other countries. In
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, China was the world’s leading energy producer and consumer in 2014 with produced around 5000
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almost the same amount. In
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second place was the US produced and consumed over 4000
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.
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, Russia, Japan and India produced and consumed almost the same amount just under 1000
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France and Brazil both produced and consumed similar, with production
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550
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and consumption was approximately 450
billion
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. Interestingly, Germany consumed more electricity than its production.
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, Korea Rep. produced and consumed energy a little under 500
billion
kWh
.
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