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The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart depicts how many males and females participated in four different kinds of courses at an adult education centre in 2009.
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, the bar chart on the right-hand side illustrates the proportions representations about 5 age groups of course
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. It is interesting to note that the information given by the bar chart portrays an exponential growth of percentages during the age groups. the aged under 20 only constitute 5% of people of all;
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, the age group of 40-49 and 50 or over are 26% and 42% respectively. Another noticeable trend is that sculpture courses had fewer
students
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 under 15 classmates,
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 it is the only class that
men
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students
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 exceed women
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. Surprisingly, the most famous course of female participants is language(40).
On the other hand
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, painting classes account for approximately half of the
men
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 becoming the most popular class of
men
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. In conclusion, the total number of women(95) outstripped the number of
men
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(65), which implies that more women workers are interested in attending job training courses.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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