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The process illustrates the several stages of developing of common cooking tool.

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The process illustrates the several stages of developing the common cooking tool.
Overall
, cooking equipment improved from ordinary to improved to complicated one in the end. There was not any handle so it was rocket science to move. The mouth of the jug was small and the shape was ordinary like others.
Nevertheless
, it was specified to cook soups. There were patterns outside of it. The stone is used to make the balance of it and the holes allow to make a fire by using the logs. After, that the stone was changed to a fireproof clay shield which was fireproof. There was only a big hole to make the fire. Not only logs but
also
 coals were used. Modern new equipment was demonstrated which is made of metal. It was much more comfortable as opposed to the previous one. It was equipped with two compact handles. There was a specific door to allow air for coming in and ash to go out.
This
 process happens only when the door is opened. There was clay lining the inside wall of it. There was a specific grate for charcoal which means only using the only when the door is opened. There was clay lining the inside wall of it. There was a specific grate for charcoal which means only using the charcoal is possible. Three resistant supporters were installed for pot.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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