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The two tables below show the exchange students from universities in Europe to Australia between 2007 and 2009.

The two tables below show the exchange students from universities in Europe to Australia between 2007 and 2009.
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The graphs indicate the population of Australian exchange university
students
 in five Europe nations, including
France
; Sweden; the United Kingdom; Germany; the Netherlands,
as well as
students
 from those regions to
Australia
 in 2007 and 2009 respectively.
Overall
, the number of young individuals from Europe nations displayed an upward trend,
while
 the population of Australian
students
 in
such
 regions remained unchanged. University
students
 from
France
 in
Australia
 accounted for the largest proportion,
however
, the figure was surpassed by Germany in the following surveyed year.
On the other hand
,
France
 remained the most popular choice for
students
 in
Australia
 during the surveyed period. The number of exchange
students
 from surveyed nations in
Australia
 experienced an increase between 2007 and 2009, from 189 leapt to 226, on top of that,
students
 from Germany underwent a surge in 2 years, exceeding
France
 as the majority population in
Australia
 among regions as
such
.
On the other hand
,
France
 was the most favoured destination for university
students
 in
Australia
, the number continued to grow from 27 to 58 between 2007 and 2009.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, france, australia with synonyms.
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