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The two tables below show the exchange students from universities in Europe to Australia between 2007 and 2009.

The two tables below show the exchange students from universities in Europe to Australia between 2007 and 2009.
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The graphs indicate the population of Australian exchange university
students
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 in five Europe nations, including
France
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; Sweden; the United Kingdom; Germany; the Netherlands,
as well as
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students
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 from those regions to
Australia
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 in 2007 and 2009 respectively.
Overall
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, the number of young individuals from Europe nations displayed an upward trend,
while
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 the population of Australian
students
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 in
such
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 regions remained unchanged. University
students
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 from
France
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 in
Australia
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 accounted for the largest proportion,
however
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, the figure was surpassed by Germany in the following surveyed year.
On the other hand
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,
France
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 remained the most popular choice for
students
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 in
Australia
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 during the surveyed period. The number of exchange
students
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 from surveyed nations in
Australia
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 experienced an increase between 2007 and 2009, from 189 leapt to 226, on top of that,
students
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 from Germany underwent a surge in 2 years, exceeding
France
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 as the majority population in
Australia
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 among regions as
such
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.
On the other hand
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,
France
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 was the most favoured destination for university
students
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 in
Australia
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, the number continued to grow from 27 to 58 between 2007 and 2009.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand, such".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, france, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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