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Millions of people every year move to English-speaking countris such as Australia, Britain or America, in order to study at school, college or university. Why do so many people want to study in English? Why is English such an important intenacional language? Give reasons for your answer.

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In our modern life technology has been developing hour by day.
That is
 why millions of human beings almost every year want to go to other regions are more and more humans speak English expression.From my point of view,they desire to earn an arm and a leg.
This
 essay agrees that numerous people want to another place to learn new languages and increase their budget. On the one hand, nowadays English is developing day by day.
For
this
 reason,people learn
this
 language by going to foreign regions.Because of
this
 , entities can earn a lot of money.We know,these days every company and factoriesʼ
directors
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director
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want
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wants
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 to accept knowledgeable employees who really know English speech.
Therefore
 every person learns
this
 voice and
they go
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 abroad because of
this
 in foreign companies human beings can increase their budget more than their public companies.Take as an example,
according to
 the statistics,humans earn 1000$ in other countries an hour but they do not earn
this
 money in their country.
On the other hand
,now many individuals desire to learn many languages.
Thus
,they
move
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 to foreign kingdoms like Australia,Britain and so on.As an example,
according to
 the data, nowadays 3 million individuals live in foreign countries especially in America because
this
 country is very beautiful and very famous around the world.
Besides
 that now more and more individuals learn foreign languages to study at foreign universities because they think that foreign universities help them to increase their critical thinking skills. In conclusion,these days hundreds of humans every year move to English-speaking societies
such
 as America, and Britain.From my point of view,
this
 is a true condition.
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task response
Address the prompt more directly by discussing the reasons why so many people want to study in English-speaking countries and the importance of English as an international language. Support your points with relevant examples and explanations.
coherence and cohesion
Organize your ideas in a more coherent manner to improve the overall structure of the essay. Use clear transition words and logical sequencing of ideas to enhance cohesion and coherence.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
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  • linguistic proficiency
  • academic institutions
  • vocational opportunities
  • lingua franca
  • pedagogical quality
  • cosmopolitan
  • global workforce
  • cross-border communication
  • mobility
  • cultural literacy
  • standardization
  • immersive learning
  • networking
  • diversity
  • integration
  • expatriates
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