The money spent by governments on space programs would be better spent on vital public services such as schools and hospitals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Money plays a vital role in every economy on
this
planet. Some people believe the cash should be used on public facilities
such
as institutions and clinics
instead
of wasting it on
space
experiments. I completely disagree with
this
idea and in
this
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I will support my opinion with relative examples.
To begin
with,
science
make
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our life convenient and easier with unpredictable innovations and inventions. So, in order to make experiments successful, Scientists require
a
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funding
by
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from
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governer authorities to continue their job to create something new
everyday
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to facilitate
public
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the public
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.
For example
- the internet which is being used in every sector whether it is a school, hospital and so on, is
also
invented by
science
.
Hence
, investment
on
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science
programs is indirectly serving communities.
Secondly
, by experimenting on
space
,
a more
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more knowledge
a piece of more knowledge
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knowledge
about
universe
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is gained
everyday
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which will
further
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used in subjects in learning institutions.
For instance
- the theories used in
current
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the current
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science
syllabus were once discovered through these exploration programs. So,
space
exploration brings
a
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more awareness and
knowledge
to
public
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the public
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. On
other
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hand, the nations which are still struggling with
shortage
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a shortage
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of learning institutions and medical care
home
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homes
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should give
the
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priority to these basic needs
instead
of spending much money on
space
programs.
For example
- India
have
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many cities where pupils are unable to access
the
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knowledge
due to
the shortage of schools.
Thus
, there is no point to spend
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the ecomony's
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ecomony's
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economy's
sources on costly inventions. To sum
this
up, exploration of
space
is very vital as it makes life more
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easy
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through new developments and provides
knowledge
whereas
developing countries should prioritise the basic needs of their residents.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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