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Educaiton for young poeple is important in many countries.However, some people think that the government should spend more money on education in adult populations who cannot read and write. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In today’s world the idea of the government should spend more money
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 important issue for individuals. As far as I am concerned, there are a couple of reasons for
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 of adults. I agree with
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 is provided below . The primary
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 account is today’s communication is important.
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literacy they can not make
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, fill out the form and work with technology. It can be
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 for the current discussion is government should spend more money
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. They can carry out
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 for adults .
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. In conclusion, there are various positive reasons for
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 literacy. But it seems to
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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