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many people no longer read newspapers or watch tv news programmes . instead they get news about the world from the internet . is this a positive development ?

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There is no denying fact that the phenomena of most of the masses in
this
 modern world do not spend
moment
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on
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reading newspapers or watching tv
news
 programmes .
However
, they get national or international
news
 from the
internet
 via social media
such
 as Instagram, Facebook etc. It is ubiquitous across the globe
due to
 its importance .
Majority
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 of statements are
due to
 their number of merits . ,
However
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 some of the
people
 highlight its demerits first . In my
further
 paragraphs, the advantages and disadvantages of the same will be discussed. Initiating with the benefits of the same , the first and foremost key benefits is that
people
 are most interested to get
news
 from the
internet
 as compared to obtaining
news
 from the
internet
 as compared to obtaining newspaper or
news
 television programmes. Most
people
 get
news
 from social media apart from that they can learn new skills .
Secondly
 , In
this
 modern
world
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 many
people
 have a busy schedule they spend major of their
time
 in their offices . so , they are unable to spend
time
on
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reading newspapers or watching television
news
 programmes but they get
news
 from different applications of social media via
Internet
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 during their travelling or whenever they get free.
Moreover
 , on its darker side , some of the drawbacks which make it problematic are first ,
people
 are distracted, and they spend most of their
time
 in its entertainment .
Secondly
 ,
now a days
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 majorly
people
 spend most of their
time
 on their mobile phones which causes
loss
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a loss
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eyesight
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of eyesight
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 and other health issues .
Last
 but not least , most
people
 spend major
time
 on their mobile phones .they don't spend quality
time
 with family and friends. In conclusion to the above statements neither its pros can be neglected nor its cons . It is a mixed bag of positive and negative . In my ,opinion should not be underestimated.
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