many people no longer read newspapers or watch tv news programmes . instead they get news about the world from the internet . is this a positive development ?

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There is no denying fact that the phenomena of most of the masses in
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modern world do not spend
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reading newspapers or watching tv
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programmes .
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, they get national or international
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from the
internet
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via social media
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as Instagram, Facebook etc. It is ubiquitous across the globe
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its importance .
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their number of merits . ,
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some of the
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highlight its demerits first . In my
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paragraphs, the advantages and disadvantages of the same will be discussed. Initiating with the benefits of the same , the first and foremost key benefits is that
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are most interested to get
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from the
internet
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as compared to obtaining
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from the
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as compared to obtaining newspaper or
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television programmes. Most
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get
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from social media apart from that they can learn new skills .
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, In
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modern
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many
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have a busy schedule they spend major of their
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in their offices . so , they are unable to spend
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reading newspapers or watching television
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programmes but they get
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from different applications of social media via
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Internet
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during their travelling or whenever they get free.
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, on its darker side , some of the drawbacks which make it problematic are first ,
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are distracted, and they spend most of their
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in its entertainment .
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,
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majorly
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spend most of their
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on their mobile phones which causes
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a loss
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eyesight
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of eyesight
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and other health issues .
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but not least , most
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spend major
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on their mobile phones .they don't spend quality
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with family and friends. In conclusion to the above statements neither its pros can be neglected nor its cons . It is a mixed bag of positive and negative . In my ,opinion should not be underestimated.
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