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Modern forms of comunication such as email and message have reduced the amonut of time people spent seeing their friends.This has had a negative effect on their lives. To what extant do you agree or disagree?

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Modern forms of conversation
for example
email
 or
message
 have reduced the quantity of time
people
 spent meeting their besites . Nowadays almost all
of
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people
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the people
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 used to
use
 social
media
 ,
this
have
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negetive
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negative
 effect .But
also
 have
positive
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a positive
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 effect
for
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people
.
Positive
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 effect for
people
 .
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 side all of
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the problem
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problem
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problems
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 solve only one
message
 or one
calling
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 for other
people
.Especially when have
long
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a long
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 distance that time social
media
such
 as
message
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messages
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 and
email
 can help our problems. Social
media
 is modern day by day.If
people
 know
amount
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the amount
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use
 social
media
such
 as
email
 and
message
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messages
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 or etc. Social
media
 is useful for
people
.
This
is give
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 a lot of
negetive
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negative
side for
people
. Modern social
media
 is
interrupt
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an interrupt
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 for nowadays`
people
 Almost all
of
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people
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the people
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 used to visit
own
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their own
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besites
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websites
 or relatives in the past.But now almost old age
people
 are lazy for meeting own friends or relatives. And they
use
email
 and
message
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messages
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 sent
for
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to
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 own friends. Almost nobody to used social
media
 in past ,and when want to see themself
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as friend
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friend
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friends
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thet
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that
 time they are meeting each other.If
people
 do not
konw
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know
amount
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the amount
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use
 social
media
 .
That is
very
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a very
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teribble
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terrible
 action
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in thier
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thier
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their
 life. In my
opinion
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,opinion
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 first
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,
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all
of
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parents
know
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toknow
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use
 social
media
message
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messages
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 and
email
 or etc.And they should
to
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fobid
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forbid
bid
 for
themself
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their
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 children to start using
message
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messages
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 or
email
.
That is
 comfortable for
thier
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their
childrens
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children's
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 health and
also
 our future.
This
 is cause to return in the past
peoples
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people's
peoples'
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 habits
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