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It is predicted that robots are going to become increasingly important in our lives. How could robots be used in the future? Will this development be a positive or a negative development?

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In the
last
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 few decades, technology has been advancing at an unprecedented rate.
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robots
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 are already a part of
individuals
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 lives, experts predict that they will become even more prevalent in the coming years.
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 essay will outline some possible uses of
robots
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 in the future and explain why
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 development will be a positive one for humanity. To embark on ,
robots
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 are going to be used in various industries
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 as manufacturing and
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 sector to replace humans.
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 to say that, they can perform the assigned work with high accuracy and in less time when compared to people
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 , a recent article published in Times Now newspaper, which is the largest circulated daily newspaper in India and
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 renowned for its accuracy and fairness, stated that 40% of the workforce in Nike company will be replaced with humanoid
robots
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 by the end of 2022. The
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 corollary of
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 they will be replacing men and women at work , particularly in areas which involve high risk. Clearly, these advancements in robotics and Artificial Intelligence will have a positive impact on society. To be more precise , by outsourcing hazardous tasks
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robots
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, human workers will be less prone to injury or death. If
robots
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 are able to extinguish fires or disarm bombs efficiently,
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society too will be safer .
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, In the health sector, even though some may worry that
robots
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 lack the empathy and understanding of a human worker, the fact is that demand for healthcare workers exceeds supply in many places, which means there is a dire need for extra help.
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 demand could well be met by
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 with artificial intelligence in the decades to come. In conclusion ,
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 essay has discussed the unimaginable potential of robotics in
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 areas which would be beneficial in future times and
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robots
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 may enhance the lives of individuals beyond expectations.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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