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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain, The table shows where the money came from and the charts show, how it was distributed. Summarise the Infermation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant,

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain, The table shows where the money came from and the charts show, how it was distributed. Summarise the Infermation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant,
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The table and pie charts above illustrate information on the police budget in the period of time for 2017 and 2018 respectively in one specific area of Great Britain. To be more specific, it is evident that the pie charts provide
informatiob
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information
 about
money
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 distribution, when the table illustrates different sources of
money
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income
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.
To begin
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 with, it is essential to emphasise that the most substantial
income
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 from 3 different resources came specifically from
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To begin
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 with, it is essential to emphasise that the most substantial
income
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 from 3 different resources
carne
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came
 specifically from National Government, namely, 175.5m in 2017 and 177.8m in 2018, which was undramatically higher.
Additionally
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, total
income
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 was higher in 2018 To delve into
money
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 distribution,
it is clear that
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 in 2017 the per cent of
money
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allocation
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 to salaries was higher, than in 2018. Notwithstanding, in 2018 the budget distribution on technology was significantly higher, than in the previous year. Even though in two fields
was
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 significant changes, in
third
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 field, namely in
biuldings
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buildings
building
 and transport, we cannot
se
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see
 any changes.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "to begin".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrate" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "substantial" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • financial sources
  • fiscal year
  • government grants
  • revenue
  • expenditure
  • law enforcement
  • public funds
  • allocation shifts
  • trend analysis
  • budgetary changes
  • funding distribution
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