In the past, most people lived in small villages where everyone knew everyone else. Nowadays, most people live in large cities where they only know a few people in their area. What do you think were the advantages and disadvantages of living in a small community?

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Previously, more and more
people
resided in
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small countryside. These days
people
live in big cities where they are familiar with few
people
in that area.
i
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strongly believe that both cases
has
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its pros and cons.
Firstly
,
nowadyas
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nowadays
it is becoming
an increasingly common habit aits
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drwmong
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drawing
some individuals moving to
large
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countryside. They prefer living
in
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there.
However
, it has negative and positive sides.
For instance
, living in
a large cities
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large cities
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could be more beneficial with its different
kind
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kinds
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of opportunities,
such
as occupations,
different
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stores, and
also
it can provide
community
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the community
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with gas, water and other things.
However
, when it comes to its drawbacks, there can be more traffic jams,
issues
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and issues
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with air
pollutions
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.
Moreover
, some mankind do not know each
others
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other
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, and
this
is a major problem
,
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because they cannot help each
others
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other
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in any case.
On the other hand
,
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in small villages would be comfortable. Because
,
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it has more comfy sides to live.
For example
, most folks know one another, and
also
they might support mutual.
Furthermore
, there
are
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sense
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a sense
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of traditions and friendships.
Moreover
, there are different
kind
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kinds
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of gardens, forests, and
also
mountain places.
Besides
, there is no air
pollutions
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pollution
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or traffic jam problems. Only fresh air and
people
raise cattle.
Therefore
, they can relax and
enjoy
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. So, when it comes to its disadvantages, it would be a little bit
challenge
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.
For instance
, if a person wants
to
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something special, he or she cannot find it. Because
,
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countryside
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does not
provides
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with anything else. And there are no more
taxi
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and preparing things.
To sum up
, as you already know, both sides are equal.
That is
why in my perception, you have to choose one side which you prefer.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sense of community
  • Bond
  • Close-knit
  • Tight-knit
  • Belonging
  • Familiarity
  • Security
  • Support system
  • Social connections
  • Look out for
  • Have someone's back
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