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The number of
children
's
responsibilities
 in the modern world were becoming to decline in compared with the past especially, in some regions. from
expert's
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perspectives
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,
this
happened
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 have positive aspects for
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the abilities
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 of
future
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in contrast
of
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to
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 that some of them have
a
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 opposite
standview
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stand view
Grandview
, In
this
 essay I intend to discuss both of these point
views
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 and say my opinion about them. On the one hand, there are those who subscribe to the view that there are several merits for the decline of
responsibilities
 of
children
. from
this
 point of view, they insist that the best way to transmit
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data to the mind of
children
 is played without any stress about roles and feedback from parents. they believe if the
children
 are becoming
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 familiar with huge roles
that
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 able to up
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ward
of
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 anxiety of them so, it is very harmful
for
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 psychology og them
especially
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 in the long run.
Furthermore
, the best way for tutorials
of
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 morals and loyalty and every
things
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with
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to
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 create a good plan for the entertainment of them altern give responsible to them.
On the other hand
, many commentators justifiably argue that there are some positive aspects when
the
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children
 have a response from toddler age. They assume that if the learner of
children
take
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different
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responsibilities
 to them, they are able to prepare for the bigger position in the future. in
this
 situation, they are able to learn several things
their
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 mistake of themselves and it is
a
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highly beneficial for their abilities of them. In conclusion,
,
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however
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 there are some merits from
responsibilities
 of that, I strongly agree the negative aspects of that are far more because the young generation
are
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 willing to learn through fun
action
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instead
 of getting stress and compulsory for dou=ing some roles.
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