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and say my opinion about them. On the one hand, there are those who subscribe to the view that there are several merits for the decline of

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create a good plan for the entertainment of them altern give responsible to them.

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, many commentators justifiably argue that there are some positive aspects when

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to them, they are able to prepare for the bigger position in the future. in

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situation, they are able to learn several things

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highly beneficial for their abilities of them. In conclusion,

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there are some merits from

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of that, I strongly agree the negative aspects of that are far more because the young generation

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willing to learn through fun

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