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The chart compares average figures for temperature and precipitation over the course of a calendar year in Kolkata.

The chart compares average figures for temperature and precipitation over the course of a calendar year in Kolkata.
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The chart provides information concerning the compares
average
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the average
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 figure between temperature and precipitation over the year in Kolkata.
This
 essay
describe
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describes
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 that date precisely here
Overall
, can be clearly seen that precipitation hit a peak of under 350mm between
on
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apply
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July to August.
Furthermore
, showed clearly rainfall slightly
increases
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increased
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 from January to March would be below 50,
however
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 it doubled from April to May and would reach upto 100 as long as reaches to peak in July and August near about 350mm. on the other ,hand it gradually decreased from October about 50
mm
 of rainfall to December less than 20
mm
.
According to
, temperatures
on
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in
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 January gradually increased till May from 20 degree
Celsius
 to hit a peak of 30
degree
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degrees
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Celsius
.
However
, temperatures steadily decreased between
on
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apply
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May to October from 30 degrees
Celsius
 to under 20 degrees
Celsius
 and
then
, there was
significant
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a significant
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decreased
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decrease
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 in temperature which result in a low of 20 degrees
Celsius
on
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in
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 December.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words mm, celsius with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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