People usually mix their private and professional life. What are the pros and cons of this?

Most
people
in
this
era which
are
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show
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show
both their privacy and professional
life
. Everybody has a
reason
for
this
.
Overall
, there are positive and negative opinions for
this
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these
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people
. The positive opinions for support
this
issue are the right to get their own happiness and the need
for
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to
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improve their social
life
. Every human has
tendency
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a tendency
the tendency
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to get happiness in
life
. There are many different ways to pursue
this
.
For example
, an influencer in social media is promote her intimate
life
and
work
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works
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to get more
people
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people's
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attention.
This
action will increase her followers. Maybe
this
is the
reason
why some
people
are glad to
show
others about both their private and work
life
. The second
reason
is the social need as a human being.
People
fuse their personal and public
life
to get more friends that have
same
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the same
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ideas or hobbies so they get more friends.
For example
, a woman
that
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apply
show examples
show
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shows
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her book collections
in
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on
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instagram
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Instagram
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to find a new relative that
love
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loves
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reading too.
This
will help
people
in their social
life
. On the
otherside
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other side
, the fusion of personal and public
life
also
has negative impacts
such
as a risk
to
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of
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criminal
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crime
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and
life
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liver
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disorder.
People
that open their both personal and public
life
can attract a criminal to rob or kill them. A woman that
show
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shows
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their office or home address can invite a thief or a bad guy to find her at her
adresses
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addresses
address
.
This
is a dangerous situation
that
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apply
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caused by
this
issue. The other
reason
is a
life
disorder that can happen in
this
mix
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mixed
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life
.
Person
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People
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will confuse about their
life
because there is no separation between privacy and
publicy
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publicity
publicly
.
This
is not good for mental health. In conclusion, every action in
this
life
always has
pro
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pros
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and
contradiction
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contradictions
show examples
. As long as
people
happy
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are happy
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to do whatever activity or lifestyle, they have
do
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to do
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it.
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