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The Internet will never replace traditional course books in schools.’ How far do you agree with this prediction?

#internet #course #books #schools #prediction
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tecnology
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technology
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coming
 to be the best tool that you can have
although
, printed
books
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. In
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 I'm going to show why I agree whit
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statement
 but how in some cases I change my posture.
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 I agree with
this
 prediction if we are talking about
books
 that you read for
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entertainment
. People that enjoy reading
perfer
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prefer
 the
fisical
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fiscal
 book to underline,
scrach
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scratch
 it, feel the texture and smell.
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, is better for your eyes to read
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papaer
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paper
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 a screen. They say that a book is the best friend that you could have
due to
 you can take it everywhere and comes with a great story.
However
, when we are
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 about research it's easier to
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read
 and find the information online. Google makes it faster to find articles, definitions, news, essays and others. Meanwhile, going to a
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library
 takes more time and isn't
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.
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Technology
 has made
this
 process simpler and more people prefer the internet for investigation. All the information and the most recent ones
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uploads
uropods
updos
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this
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books
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this
 information and online you have millions.
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, I support that
books
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for
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 the
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 but both
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together
are
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an
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apply
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amazing
tool
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tools
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 for everything that you may want.
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replacement
replacemnt
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 it could be up
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 everyone to choose what fits more to them. I agree with the prediction but I
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 that the most
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important
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statement
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