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Many countries are experiencing population growth and a need for more homes stop should these new homes be constructed in the existing cities or should new towns be built for this purpose? Discuss and Give your opinion.

The
population
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 has been rising significantly on the earth in
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last
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 few decades, owing to the improvements to standards of living and better
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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. Many
people
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 are of the opinion that new homes be constructed in existing
cities
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,
while
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 there is another faction believing that new
towns
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 should be built
instead
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.
This
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 essay will discuss and explain why new
cities
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 are beneficial to attain
population
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growth
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.
Due to
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 the sudden burst in
population
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growth
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, the first thing coming to one’s mind Is developing more housing projects in the existing
cities
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. It seems partly right, because of several reasons. First and foremost, the government is of the opinion that it requires a significant reduction in public spending for building new infrastructure, catering to the newcomers to
cities
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.
Furthermore
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, existing economic, medical and transportation facilities in the
cities
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 can support
this
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 additional influx of
people
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.
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, New York City was able to handle additional
people
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 coming to work with the additional high-rise building
instead
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 of requiring significant new investments in new
cities
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.
Hence
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, the thought of building new homes in existing
cities
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 seems enticing in the shorter run. Building on new housing infrastructure in new
towns
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 for
population
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growth
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 is beneficial in the longer run.
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, it helps in preventing overcrowding from leading to any
further
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 issues,
such
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 as water scarcity, increasing electricity costs, and longer wait times to use public spaces and resources.
Secondly
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, new well-planned
cities
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 can help in the next century by being a torch bearer
for
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of
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growth
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, economic activity and diversity.
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, as
people
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 stay in new
cities
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, they try to find work nearby and establishes business leading to a surge in financial
growth
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. Government can
then
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 invest in the latest in the greatest medical and transportation infrastructure from scratch,
instead
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 of stressing existing facilities. So, building homes in the new
towns
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 is the direction to go forward.
This
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 essay discussed the reasons why new housing complexes for catering to
the
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population
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growth
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is
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are
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 helpful in newly built
cities
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 or upcoming
towns
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instead
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 of overcrowding existing ones. In my opinion, looking at the long-term horizon, to better address the implications of an additional surge in
population
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 on health, economy and transportation, a new city or town should be used for additional housing.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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