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The process diagaram details the steps by which liquid chocolate is produced from cocoa beans. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The given diagram depicts the processing of
cocoa
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beans
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 becoming liquid
chocolate
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 with three main steps from harvested
beans
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 to liquid
chocolate
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 produced.
Cocoa
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 trees grow
in particular
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 countries namely South America, Africa, and Indonesia. When
cocoa
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 pods are ripe,
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, the colour turns in to red, and the pods are ready to be harvested. The harvested pods are
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 opened and the contents, white
cocoa
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beans
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, are taken, next the
beans
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 are fermented by covering them with banana leaves. After that process, the
beans
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 which have been fermented are spread under the sun to dry them. Since drying, the
beans
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 are put in large sacks to deliver to the factory by train or lorry. In the factory, the
beans
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 are roasted in an oven at a certain temperature of around 360 Celsius.
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, the
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 are grind by machine to split the outer shell so that the
chocolate
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 powder has produced.
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, the inner part
beans
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 crushed are pressed by equipment which produces a liquid
chocolate
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