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You work for an international company and need to take some time off work to celebrate a family event. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter ● give details of the family event and why it is important you attend ● say how much time you will need away from the office ● suggest how your work could be covered while you are away

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Dear Mr/Ms Manager, My name is Sampurna Bakti. I am writing
this
leter
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letter
 to inform you that I could not attend
to
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your company
this
 week. My Father is going to celebrate his
bhirtday
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birthday
 in my home town in Bandung.
Furthermore
, My big family will go there, so
i
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 need to help my mother to
preparing
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 it. She is 60
this
 year,
therefore
 she just has a little energy. It means I can not let her
doing
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 it by herself.
That is
 why, I hope you could understand
about
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the situation. For your
information
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 you are invited too. So, please join us if you have
a
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time. In fact, I am going to leave
this
 company for a week. It will take 3 days to reach Bandung and
i
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 will
helping
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the
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 event for 3 days. After
it
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i
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have
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 take a rest for 1 day. Please do not worry about it because
i
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 have let Anna know to cover my job.
i
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 was telling about details.
Also
,
i
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 can do
remotely
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 if
i
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 want to check the work.
i
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 will handle it properly. Thank you for
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 attention. Yours
Faitfully
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Faithfully
, Sampurna
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The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Dear [Manager's Name]
  • I am writing to inform you
  • I would like to request
  • my presence is required
  • celebrate an important family event
  • a significant milestone
  • attendance at this event is crucial
  • I understand the importance of my role
  • I kindly request
  • leave of absence
  • for a period of
  • I will be happy to assist
  • delegate my tasks
  • to ensure a smooth transition
  • handover my responsibilities
  • I apologize for any inconvenience
  • I appreciate your understanding
  • Thank you for your attention to this matter
  • Sincerely
  • [Your Name]
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