Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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Many people with health issues are trying alternative
medicines
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and
treatment
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treatments
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instead
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of
channeling
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a medical doctor. Some people think
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as
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is
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a positive development. But, based on my point of view, I think
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is a negative approach. Symptoms
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as fever, headache, cramps, etc are the warning messages given by the body to convey
us
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to us
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that there is something adverse happening inside the body. Once we receive
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message, we should investigate it and get proper treatment for it. If you seek help from a physician, he or she will perform some blood testing,
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and investigate the cause
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symptoms. But if we just take some
medicines
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to
releive
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relieve
receive
them by
our selves
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ourselves
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, we will miss the opportunity to discover the problems we have.
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is dangerous. As an example, if we try
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for fever by ourselves, without knowing that we have dengue infection, it can even take our life. It is advised that no
medicines
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should be prescribed for dengue patients, other than paracetamol. In case, if we
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try any powerful drug, it can aggravate the condition and push us to the severe form of the illness.
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can even cause death.
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, for an infection in
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, doctors prescribe antibiotics to kill germs. In case, if we have not commenced antibiotics on time, it can even lead to amputation of the leg. Many incidents have been reported in newspapers on these kinds of unfortunate events
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negligence
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the negligence
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of individuals, which could have been prevented. In conclusion,
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people should follow proper channels for the diseases, rather than following alternative options.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicines
  • treatments
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • health problems
  • usual doctor
  • access
  • personalized approach
  • holistic well-being
  • lack of regulation
  • evidence-based research
  • proper medical treatment
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