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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

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These days, more and more people from
diffrent
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different
 societies, prefer to travel and discover new
places
. Some of the
places
 have dangerous and difficult conditions for living, like the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. The goal of
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to
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 explain some advantages and drawbacks. First of all, in the modern world, individuals start to prefer the extremal types of tourism, which include to travel in dangerous
place
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places
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,
such
 as some regions in Africa, Mexico or Columbia. Many people are concerned about
this
 way of rest.
For instance
, in
such
 kind of
places
, there are some
problem
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 with infrastructure, poor level of communication,no Internet, no hotels or stores. On top of that, there are troubles with fresh and drinkable water and
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a high-level
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high-level
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 of crime.
Then
, it is
a
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 extremely high risk for life.
On the other hand
, there are some benefits
for
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this
 type of rest. The population strongly believe that
such
 kind of tourism
very
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importand
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important
 and interesting, especially for
youngers
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younger
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. The reason why is that it
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 and
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 old frames.
Moreover
, people start to produce and feel more adrenaline.
Time
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 to time, these
places
 have
the
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unreal beautiful nature,
unordinary
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 climate, clean air, food and the weather.
Finally
, without a doubt, some individuals suppose the governments should make these
places
 more comfortable and safer.
To sum up
, visiting
places
, without any conditions,is a sophisticated challenge for tourists. There are a lot of positive and negative facts.
In contrast
, advantages are more important than drawbacks.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • breathtaking landscapes
  • unique ecosystems
  • sense of adventure
  • personal growth
  • indigenous cultures
  • environmental conservation
  • climate change
  • environmental degradation
  • economically disadvantaged areas
  • physical health
  • harsh weather
  • difficult terrain
  • limited access to medical facilities
  • fragile ecosystems
  • habitat destruction
  • basic amenities
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