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The graph below shows the number of library books read by boys and girls at Starmouth School from 2009 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of library books read by boys and girls at Starmouth School from 2009 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph indicates the
quantity
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number
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 of library
books
 that were read by male and female minors at Starmouth School between 2009 and 2012. In 2009 the
number
 of
books
 read by
boys
 was twice as much as the
amount
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number
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 of
books
 read by
girls
.
This
 trend continued to grow for the next year. The
number
 increased from 50 to 80
books
 for
boys
 and for
girls
 the figure changed from 25 to 40 units. In 2011 there was a dramatic increase.
Books
 that
girls
 read reached the point of 100, at the same period of time
boys
 peaked at the same
number
 as females. For the following
year
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 the pattern was changed
due to
 the stable growth in
number
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a number
the number
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 of
books
 that
girls
 read. Amount of
books
 read by
boys
 fell noticeably from 100 to 80 units.
Overall
,
girls
 managed to surpass the
amount
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number
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 of read
books
 even with the difference in two times with
boys
 at the beginning of the graph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, number, boys, girls with synonyms.
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