Some people think that formal education should start for children as early as possible. While others think that it should not start until 7 years of age.

Formal
education
plays an important role in developing personality. It is often thought that formal
education
should start at
early
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stages of a child's
life
while
others believe that it is not necessary till the age of six or seven
years
.
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education
is more important and has its own benefits
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starting later in
life
. Early schooling is thought beneficial and compulsory in
few
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countries. Children have sharper picking and learning power as compared to adult or
grown up
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children. Starting proper learning at
early
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stage helps them to develop basic and other skills better
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those who start late.
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example of Pakistan, here formal
education
starts between three to four
years
old and by the age of 22 to 23 a student graduates to start his/her career. On the other side, few countries start schooling at the age of 6 to 7
years
. Before turning 7, children play and learn basic
life
skills and manners. They are not forced to learn anything in books. They can learn once they are turned 7
years
old.
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late starters do not have to bear the pressure on their minds as they have grown up a bit. As
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in
Russia
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my nephew started his proper
education
when he turned 7 and
half
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years
old. Prior to
that
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he was taking part in fun and learning activities only. In conclusion,
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proper institutes helps them learn more quickly and they have
better
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tendency of remembering anything.
Moreover
, they have more time in future to learn many things as they have started early in their
life
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Social interactions
  • Formative years
  • Curiosity
  • Structured environments
  • Preschool activities
  • Unstructured play
  • Developmental pace
  • Emotional and social skills
  • Undue stress and pressure
  • Natural development
  • Informal learning methods
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