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The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods (wheat, maize, rice) by people in four different countries.

The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods (wheat, maize, rice) by people in four different countries.
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The table illustrates the amount of food consumed by three types of harvest (
wheat
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,
maize
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 and
rice
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) by the countries (
Cambodia
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,
Poland
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, Egypt and
Mexico
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). Units are measured in calories per person per day (cal/
p
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/d).
Overall
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, the major
consumption
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 of each kind of crop is various. The frequency of eating
rice
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 is the highest in
Cambodia
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 ca. 1445 cal/
p
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/d.
On the other hand
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,
wheat
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 is the most popular crop in
Poland
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, the
value
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 is 1095 cal/
p
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/d.
According to
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this
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 tendency, the
consumption
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 of
maize
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 has an amount of 1083 cal/
p
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/d in
Mexico
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. Regarding the second most popular crop, Egypt has a
consumption
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value
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 of 501 cal/
p
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/d for
rice
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,
while
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Mexico
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 has a
value
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 of 57 cal/
p
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/d. The
consumption
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 of
wheat
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 in
Poland
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 is 865 cal/
p
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/d,
while
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 in
Mexico
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, the amount is 275 cal/
p
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/d. In Egypt,
maize
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 has a utilization
value
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 of 578 cal/
p
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/d,
while
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 in
Cambodia
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 the
value
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 is 103 cal/
p
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/d. The lowest
value
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 of
rice
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consumption
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 is in
Poland
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, which is 19 cal/
p
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/d. The values for
wheat
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 and
maize
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 are 18 cal/
p
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/d in
Cambodia
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 and 0 cal/
p
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/d in
Poland
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, respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words wheat, maize, rice, cambodia, poland, mexico, p, consumption, value with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • basic foods
  • wheat
  • maize
  • rice
  • countries
  • comparing
  • analyzing
  • trends
  • factors
  • influencing
  • patterns
  • implications
  • health
  • nutrition
  • solutions
  • food security
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