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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main Features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main Features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph highlights information about the amount of holiday-makers who called on a special Caribbean
island
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, over a seven-
year
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 period between 2010 and 2017.
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, it can be seen that there was a dramatic upward trend in the
amount
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number
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 of total travellers and
although
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 the guests staying on the
island
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 experienced a fluctuation direction, there was a sharp increase in luxury
ships
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ship
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 stayers. Looking at the details, in the first
year
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, only 1
million
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 nations travelled to the
island
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 and
then
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 there was a consistent increase
year
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 on
year
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 and the ratio remained stable with 2.7
million
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 from 2015 to 2016 but it did not
stopped
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stop
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 and hit a peak in 2017 with 3.5
million
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 visitors. Regarding
to
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apply
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voyager, it started
around
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at around
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 0.3
million
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 and
following
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this
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,this
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 it fluctuated
the
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for the
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 next three years but after that step by
step
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,step
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 the percentage grew and stopped
in
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at
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 2
million
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 which
proven
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proved
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 that it beat the stay category in 2017.
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, the
island
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 stayers were ranked second in 2010 and it remained stable in 2011
and
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apply
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after that the figure rose to 1.5
million
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 but in 2016 decreased to over 1
million
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 and
subsequently
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, it again improved to 1.5 in the
last
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year
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.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, year, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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