The chart below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The first line chart highlights information about
portion
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a portion
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of housework with electronic gadgets and the second one is about the amount of time
which
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spend
for
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household chores during a week in one country from 1920 to 2012.
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, it can be seen that there were upward trends in three electronic appliances over the period in question with the exception of
washing
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the washing
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machine because of slight fluctuations and in the second line chart we can see
steady
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a steady
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decrease
about
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in
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amount
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the amount
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of time for cleaning. Looking at details, the lowest percentage of electronic giant is
about
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refrigerator
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refrigerators
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with around 2% in 1920 and in the same way, washing machine and vacuum cleaner ratios were 40% and 30%
in
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turn. In
this
way, in 1920,
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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hit the peak
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at
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100% and ten years later Vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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hit the top percentage
with
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100% and it remained steady from 2000 to 2019, so the
used
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of electronic devices for housework showed that the amount of time which spend for cleaning decrease steadily with 50% in 1920 to 11%in 2019.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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