The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table
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the
sales
of two Fairtrade-labelled items in five European
countries
in 1999 and 2004:
coffee
and
bananas
.
Overall
,
coffee
sales
increased in all the
countries
in 2004 compared to 1999, especially in the
UK
sales
of
this
item were highest compared to the other nations.
Besides
, in Sweden and Denmark,
sales
of
bananas
experienced a downward trend during the selected period. It can be seen obviously from the table that the dramatic increase in
coffee
consumption was
the
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UK
, which was
making
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up from 1.5 to 20
millions
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of
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euros
in 1999 and 2004 respectively. In 1999, the sale of
coffee
in the
UK
was just making up 1.5
millions
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of
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euros
, which was half of the
sales
that
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observed in Switzerland. Switzerland at that time was the country with the highest
coffee
sales
accounting for exactly 3
millions
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of
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euros
. After 5 years, the
sales
of
coffee
in these
countries
increases. To be more specific, the
sales
in
UK
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the UK
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go up dramatically to reach a peak at 20
millions
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million
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of
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euros
in the year 2004, which was almost double
than
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the combined
sales
amount in the remaining four
countries
. It is
also
evident that banana
sales
from 1999 to 2004 showed a declining tendency in Sweden and Denmark.
Whereas
, the biggest amount of
bananas
was
consuming
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in Switzerland with 15
millions
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of
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euros
in 1999 and increased by more than 3 times in 2004-making up the value of 47
millions
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euros
.
Besides
,
bananas
sales
in the
UK
and Belgium
also
went up, comprising
to
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5.5 and 4 million
euros
respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, besides".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, countries, coffee, bananas, uk, millions, euros with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go up" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade-labelled
  • sales figures
  • percentage increase/decrease
  • European countries
  • sales volume
  • notable trend
  • exponential growth
  • moderate rise
  • marked decline
  • comparative analysis
  • economic factors
  • consumer preferences
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