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Stress is now a major problem in many countries around the world. What are some of the factors in modern society that cause this stress, and how can we reduce it?

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It is true that there is a significant population of the world is affected by stress.
This
 essay will outline a number of reasons for
this
 problem and a number of possible solutions to help tackle the issue. Anxiety is attributed to various factors and one main cause of that issue is related to work. The first reason is the long working hours.
People
 have to face the tension of salary to satisfy the demand for financial stability.
This
 leads employees to work extra hours even overtime to meet deadlines.
For example
, officers are coping with the pressure to complete certain tasks within a given
time
 frame.
As a result
 of
this
, workers get stressed easily because if they do not do it on
time
, they will be deducted salary or
get
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apply
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fired.
Furthermore
,
lacking
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a lack of
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time
 for recreational activities and refreshing their energy
also
increase
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increases
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 nervousness.
Secondly
, the development of social media can influence
people
, especially teenagers on a negative side. To clarify
this
 point, take Tiktok as an example, it is not difficult to catch a critical someone’s body comment.
Thus
,
this
 will trigger the users
getting
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 more mental health problems. There are a number of viable measures to help solve
this
 matter.
To begin
 with,
people
 can release their stress by spending
time
 doing their hobbies and being around someone
that
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who
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 helps them feel comfortable.
Moreover
, if
people
 can set a logical goal, and prioritise tasks based on importance and urgency, they can gain more happiness and lower distress. An additional measure to minimize the irritation is reducing hours
spend
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 on social media. By doing
this
,
people
 are more prone to gain self-confidence by not being compared with other
people
. In conclusion, there are various negative consequences of anxiety and appropriate steps need to be taken to tackle
this
 problem
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