In today’s world of advanced science and technology, we still greatly value our artists such as musicians, painters and writers. What can art tell us about life that science and technology cannot ?

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cannot provide. I would contend that there are a lot of values of modern

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which the arts can convey and help

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that the former cannot. Without a shadow of a doubt, there are abundant aspects that

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, especially meaningful messages. Almost all songs gradually have their own meaning which

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transmitted through lyrics by harmonists. Lyrics the more easy to understand, the more accessible and conveyable to it can be to the audience.

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, a wealth of song exhortation

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are widely acknowledged, feelings are worthy of mentioning. Music can enhance human emotion, if

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for various reasons, they can reduce stress and let their hair down by indulging in music. Popular all over the world is “Happy” which is a song performed by Pharrell William that helped

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, escape from pressure by study, work and daily

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cannot be conveyed by modern

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, artists like musicians, painters and writers bring to humans a wealth of desert.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

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In today’s world of advanced science and technology, we still greatly value our artists such as musicians, painters and writers. What can art tell us about life that science and technology cannot ?

Fully explain your ideas

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Other believe it is important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people argue that all experimentation on animals is bad and should be outlawed. However, others believe that important scientific discoveries can be made from animal experiments. Can experimentation on animals be justified? Are there any alternatives?

Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world.

“Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor.

In some countries children take up paid jobs during the summer vacation. Some people feel that this amounts to child labour. Others argue that summer jobs help children learn valuable lessons. Discuss both views and give your opinion.