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There have been major advances in technology over recent decades and this has led to significant improvements in people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Developments in
technology
 in recent years has brought great impacts
to
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 the lives of
individual
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an individual
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 in
the
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society today. I strongly believe that the current positive changes in
technology
has
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 improved
people
's lives. One of the main impact of
technology
 on individual's lives is that
,
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 it
generate
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 employment opportunities in different organizations.
People
 who are
computer
 literate have been able to be employed
to
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in
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 various organizations like airports, companies, banks, and hospitals. All these organizations depend on
technology
 in their
day to day
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day-to-day
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 activities.
For instance
,
computer
 experts have been able to be employed
to
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in
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 places like
bank
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banks
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 and they make
use
 of
computer
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computers
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 to store their data.
Also
, many medical
practitioner
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practitioners
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 have been considered for job
opportunity
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opportunities
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 because of their knowledge of
computer
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computers
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.
Secondly
,
development
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 of
technology
 improves
level
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the level
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 of communication. Many
people
 from various places have been able to communicate maximally through the
use
 of telephones, electronic
mails
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mail
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 and other social media handles. To illustrate, a friend of mine was able to apply for a job inside her room,
this
 application was sent via electronic mail and the organization replied back within two days of application.
In addition
,
people
 have been able to reach out to one another through the
use
 of telephone.
However
,
technology
 has helped to reduce the workload at home and
also
 improved
means
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the means
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 of transportation.Household chores like washing clothes and plates, have been made easier by the
use
 of washing
machine
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machines
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. Cars, aeroplanes, ships and trains have
serve
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 as means of transportation for
people
 and goods.
For example
,
initially
, I normally spend about three hours washing my clothes but with the help of
technology
, I have been able to
use
washing
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the washing
a washing
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 machine for washing clothes
under
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in under
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 thirty minutes.
Furthermore
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 I get to my place of work easily
buy
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by
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 driving my car. In summary,
although
 there are a lot of benefits attached to the advent of
technology
but
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our daily activities should not be dependent on it.
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