There have been major advances in technology over recent decades and this has led to significant improvements in people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Developments in
technology
in recent years has brought great impacts
to
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the lives of
individual
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in
the
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society today. I strongly believe that the current positive changes in
technology
has
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improved
people
's lives. One of the main impact of
technology
on individual's lives is that
,
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it
generate
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employment opportunities in different organizations.
People
who are
computer
literate have been able to be employed
to
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various organizations like airports, companies, banks, and hospitals. All these organizations depend on
technology
in their
day to day
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activities.
For instance
,
computer
experts have been able to be employed
to
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places like
bank
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banks
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and they make
use
of
computer
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computers
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to store their data.
Also
, many medical
practitioner
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have been considered for job
opportunity
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opportunities
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because of their knowledge of
computer
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computers
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.
Secondly
,
development
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of
technology
improves
level
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the level
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of communication. Many
people
from various places have been able to communicate maximally through the
use
of telephones, electronic
mails
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and other social media handles. To illustrate, a friend of mine was able to apply for a job inside her room,
this
application was sent via electronic mail and the organization replied back within two days of application.
In addition
,
people
have been able to reach out to one another through the
use
of telephone.
However
,
technology
has helped to reduce the workload at home and
also
improved
means
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of transportation.Household chores like washing clothes and plates, have been made easier by the
use
of washing
machine
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machines
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. Cars, aeroplanes, ships and trains have
serve
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as means of transportation for
people
and goods.
For example
,
initially
, I normally spend about three hours washing my clothes but with the help of
technology
, I have been able to
use
washing
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the washing
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machine for washing clothes
under
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thirty minutes.
Furthermore
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I get to my place of work easily
buy
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driving my car. In summary,
although
there are a lot of benefits attached to the advent of
technology
but
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our daily activities should not be dependent on it.
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  • innovations
  • breakthroughs
  • automation
  • AI (Artificial Intelligence)
  • mobile technologies
  • diagnostic tools
  • renewable energy
  • efficiency
  • economic growth
  • knowledge sharing
  • global scale
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