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The table below give information about sales of Fair trade labeled coffee and banana in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.

The table below give information about sales of Fair trade labeled coffee and banana in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.
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The two tables
depicts
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sales
 data of
coffee
 and
banana
 in two years in five European states.
Overall
, it can be evident from the table, the
coffee
saled
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sale
sales
 in
UK
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the UK
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at
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 the
higest
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highest
trand
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trend
. In 2019 the
UK
saled
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sales
 1.5millions of
euros
 but in 2004 it reaches at 20milions of
euros
while
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 Switzerland at the maximum trend
about
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 the
saled
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sales
 of
banana
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bananas
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. In 1999
saled
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sales
 rate of
banana
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the banana
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15
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 but in 2004 it incline triple times of its original price
at
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 47
millions
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of
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euros
.
Coffee
sales
 increases in
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others
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 four countries in 2004 but
banana
sales
 in two countries the
swedan
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Swedan
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 and Danmark on reverse rates. From the first
tables
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,the
coffee
 rate in the
UK
 at the maximum cost between
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the others
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others
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other
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 four states
..
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 In 1999,
coffee
saled
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sales
 rates rose up 1.5 to 20 in 2004.
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Switzerland, at the second number the
coffee
saled
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sales
salad
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 became double from its original
sales
 in 2019.
While
 Denmark, Belgium and Sweden
also
 increase their
saled
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sales
salad
 from 3.6
millions
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million
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of
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euros
 to 4.7
millions
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million
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of
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euros
 in 1999 and 2004. The second
tables
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 can be seen that
,
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the
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Switzerland, at
the
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 peak level for
saled
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sales
in
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banana
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bananas
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it
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increased its figures
15
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 to 47 in 1999
ans
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and
 2004. The second one the
UK
 sour its
saled
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sales
salad
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1millions
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 of
euros
 to 5.5
millions
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million
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of
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euros
. As compared to
others
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 states, Sweden and Denmark declined
saled
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sale
sales
 rates in 2004 .
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, coffee, banana, uk, millions, euros with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 3 times.
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