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Being a celebrity such as famous film star are sport personality bring problems as well as benefits.

#celebrity #film #star #sport #personality
Famous
people
 like
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movie stars and sports athletes have a luxurious benefit
however
, there can
also
 be determined. It seems to
be
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me that pros or more than its cons. I will articulate my pinpoints in
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 paragraph To inaugurate that, less privacy is enjoyed by well-known
people
 all the time they target and
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 with paparazzi and fans. Even though they are single events and behaviour are closely watched by society
as a result
 they are under pressure to maintain their lifestyle another drawback is that Superstar lead a hectic resistance which makes it difficult to maintain a balance
due to
this
 they experience mental breakdown, drug abuse and personal relationship. Take the example of Sushant Singh Rajput and Divya Bharti's suicide and their resistance. On the flip side, there are numerous merits of living a dignified life.
Firstly
, celebrities get stranded, attention and organisation from the public many of the population follow popular
people
 as the role model. They do not even get respect in the countries but are proud International
Secondly
 day and all out of money by working with hi brands
such
 as ACC Cement, and Lakme. Akshay Kumar is
the a
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 master of Acc Cement.
Thirdly
, they are recognised at an international level when they play the Olympic games or other events like cricket series. It can bring repetition for both
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the country and himself
such
 as Sachin Tendulkar is renowned in the field of cricket.
To conclude
, it is a gift with a few
people
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 me it has more pros and the trouble.
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