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Some people think that economic progress is the only way to measure a country's success, while others think that there are other factors, which can be used to measure a country's success. What are these factors? And among them, which one is more important than others?

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Many individuals opine that budgetary growth is the only action to measure a
nation
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's achievements,
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 others would argue that there are other aspects
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 schooling system,
health
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care
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 ,public privilege ,and laws that are very essential to measure a
nation
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's improvement.And among them,
freedom
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 is
one
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 of the most crucial elements than others. Monetary
progress
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 is
one
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 of the best ways to measure a
country
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's success but
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 economic ,achievement there
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 various factors which play a vital
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 to build
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 successful
nation
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 and
one
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 of them
factor
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 is the standard education system. The literacy rate is
one
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 of the major aspects of a
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's
progress
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,
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 a good education structure, many
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 get good employment in various sectors which helps in the economy.
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 the second
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 is
health
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care
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 systems
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 as hospitals, primary
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care
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 centres and screening centres are very important.
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, Singapore,
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 of the most developed nations where all the factors play an important role to build a successful
nation
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. Among them, independence is the most important
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 for the
country
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 for success.
Freedom
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 of thought,and speech are essential for development. it is vital because
people
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 live without any stressful environment and they enjoy their life as they wish.
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, there is a certain
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 where
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 live under a controlled environment
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 as North Korea which affects the
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's development, In conclusion, many
people
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 believe that economic
progress
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 is
one
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 of the most important measurements of a
country
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's
progress
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,
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 others say other factors
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 as education,
health
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care
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 ,laws and
freedom
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 are essential, I believe that the most important
factor
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 is
freedom
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 for the
country
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's development.
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