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The bar charrt shows expectation to change of European young people in the next 20 years in different areas.

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The bar chart gives statistical information regarding European young
people
's expectations for change in five different aspects of life over the 20 years period.
Overall
, all participants answered that aspects of life will get worse with the exception of
people
's communication which expects improvement. Meanwhile, the vast majority of surveyed young individuals predicted a decline in air
quality
. Looking at the bar chart in more detail, a significantly higher proportion of Europeans claimed that there will be a deterioration in air
quality
, at 77% than an improvement, amounting to the largest gap between the two different surveyed answers.
This
 is followed by the statistics for water
quality
 and health, with two-thirds and just above half of candidates seeing a forecast in decline respectively.
On the other hand
, the greatest number of reported answers predicted an increase in communication between
people
, at roughly 65%. Though there is a close similarity between candidates, there is only a 2% higher number of
people
 expecting the food
quality
 will get worse than 49% standing on the improvement.
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