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some people believe that social media plays an important role in our lives. Some say that social media is not important to our lives..... discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Some
people
 believe that social
networks
 are important in our lives. and some say we don't need it. Today, the role of social
networks
 is important. In
this
 essay, I will analyze the above arguments and give my opinion. .......... Most
people
 living today would say that social media plays an important role in our lives. Because today it is impossible to live without social
networks
. Without
them
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 you will not be able to know the news and communicate with your loved ones far away.
this
 is bad. Because it is wrong not to use them
while
 the technology is developing. Certainly in good faith. ..........
On the other hand
, now some say that there is no need to use social
networks
. and most of these
people
 are elderly. Because they don't know how to use social
networks
 or there may be other reasons. Just like, in their time there was no social network, and they see the present as before.
People
 who think social media is not important always say negative things about social media… In conclusion, social
networks
 have played an important role in our modern world. I am not gonna lie it's hard to imagine life without them. And of
course
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 they should be used only for good purposes.
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