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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart compares the frequency of eating in fast
food
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 restaurants
of
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in
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 Americans from 2003 to 2013.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 there are no significant differences between each year in each frequency of eating fast
food
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, they all have a relatively similar pattern.
While
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people
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 ate fast
food
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 every day and never eat fast
food
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 was rare compared with other categories, most of them ate once a
week
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 and once or twice a
month
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. In 2003,
people
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 who ate in fast
food
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 restaurants once a day were the most uncommon, at around 4% only,
while
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 over 30% of them ate once a
week
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 and once or twice a
month
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. A similar trend was seen in 2006,
which
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when
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 the figure was the lowest in everyday categories, at 3% and the highest was 'once a
week
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', reaching a peak of approximately 33%, 2% more than that in 2003.
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, a drastic drop was seen in 'once or twice a
month
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' in 2006, which fell by 5% to 25%. In terms of the percentage of
people
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 consuming at junk
food
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 shops in 2013,
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people
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the people
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 consumed every day remained the lowest, at the same level as that in 2006.
By contrast
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, the percentage of them eating once a
week
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 decreased to 27%, but the figure for
people
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 eating once or twice a
month
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 rose to the peak of 33%, 8% more than that in 2006.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, people, week, month with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fast food consumption
  • dining frequency
  • decade overview
  • trend analysis
  • to dine out
  • fluctuation
  • sharp increase
  • gradual decline
  • eating habits
  • statistical comparison
  • consuming pattern
  • noteworthy change
  • anomaly
  • periodic comparison
  • data interpretation
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