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People now have the freedom to work and live anywhere in the world due to the development of communication , technology and transportation . Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages ?

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In
this
 modern era ,
due to
 technological advancements , individuals of the world are far more connected to each other than past and are living in a global village . People these days are free to do jobs and businesses anywhere around the globe .Owing to
evolution
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 of technology , ways of communication and commutation have
also
 evolved .
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as if
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why the merits of
this
development
 weigh more than its demerits . To embark on , there is an array of advantages
of
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this
development
 . As
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individuals now can work from anywhere around the globe .
Due to
 the enhancement in ways of communication people can do videoconferencing with their clients and colleagues even
while
 being in another continent . To
examplify
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,
work
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 from home is a reality today in almost every sector .
Moreover
 , the evolution of technology has evolved mankind in almost every aspect . Nowadays , it takes just hours to reach a destination which is even millions of
kilometers
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 away. Not only has
this
development
 led to
convienience
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convenience
 but
also
 to better standards of living for
masses
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 .
Although
 there are
plethora
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 of advantages of
this
development
 ,
but
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the frequent utilization of it
also
 has severe environmental ramifications . Various appliances emit greenhouse gasses which deteriorate the natural balance . The depletion of
ozone
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 layer , which protects the earth's surface from detrimental ultraviolet radiations which in turn might cause skin ailments
such
 as dermic or epidermic cancer in humans .
To conclude
 , though there are some serious demerits of technological advancements but surely its merits
such
 as
convienience
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convenience
 in ways of interaction and travelling outweigh its disadvantages .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • communication technology
  • transportation
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • freedom
  • work and live
  • development
  • increased job opportunities
  • flexibility
  • work-life balance
  • cultural exposure
  • diversity
  • economic growth
  • globalization
  • social isolation
  • loneliness
  • loss of community
  • sense of belonging
  • expensive cost of living
  • housing
  • strain on infrastructure
  • resources
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