Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara or the Antartic, What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

It is true that with the development of networks and smart mobile phones, having an adventure to those far away and tough
places
can be much more convenient than before. In my view, visiting a poor-conditioned district is pretty interesting, but
also
along with
life danger. On the one hand, we cannot deny that exploring nature can benefit us a lot, especially
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that very few human beings have ever footed,
such
as the Sahara desert.
Firstly
, taking an adventure like
this
can give us confidence, feeling like a huge achievement we have made.
Secondly
, the
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people ever
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, the more attractive it would be. Human beings have the desire to have a look at those mysterious
places
.
Finally
,
places
with difficult conditions are always beautiful, less polluted, and less modern, because being undeveloped in a sense means that the original beauty of the scenery is largely preserved.
On the other hand
, serious danger may hide in beautiful scenes. We see news of tragedy every year. During those adventures, people may face
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extreme
situation
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such
as
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of water and food, which are basic life supplies.
Besides
, very high or low
temperature
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can cause dangerous results,
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endanger life. Most importantly, the signal can be poor in those far away
places
.
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between us and
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world may be cut suddenly, which not only can let us lose direction, but
also
causes huge trouble on emergency calls when we face dangers. In a word, these dangerous situations may occur to any adventurers, even if they had taken the professional course before the visit. In conclusion, taking adventure to far away
places
would be fun, but we should not dismiss the dangerous factors behind it.
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