The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart and figure compare the
export
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earnings
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of a country in five categories between 2015 and 2016 and the
proportion
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change
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in the above five categories in 2016 compared with 2015.
It is clear that
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the
proportion
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of
export
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earnings
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in
the
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petroleum
products
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is far higher among
other
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the other
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four categories and the
export
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earnings
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of the
products
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in 2016 is more than
2015
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in 2015
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. Textiles
is
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the greatest
proportion
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of
change
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between 2015 and 2016. In 2016, petroleum
products
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is around 62
billion
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,
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whereas
the
export
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earnings
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2
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billion
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less
in
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than
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the
earnings
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in 2015. The
export
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earnings
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of engineered goods
is
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the second category that can earn more than 60
billion
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,
while
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around 57 million in 2015. The
export
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of
earnings
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of Gems and jewellery and Agricultural
products
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in the country
both
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below 50
billion
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.
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, the
earnings
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of agricultural
products
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is 10
billion
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less than gems and jewellery both in the year
of
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2015 and 2016. Textiles is the least earning in 2015 and there are nearly the same amount
with
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agricultural
products
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in 2016. Compared
the
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to the
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amount of
export
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earnings
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in 2015 and 2016, the greatest
proportion
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change
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is textiles, which increased 15.24% from 2015 and 2016. Engineered
products
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is
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the second
proportion
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change
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, which is at 8.5% and the percentage
change
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of petroleum
products
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is at 3% and agricultural
products
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only get 0.81%.
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, gems and jewellery
is
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the only category which has decreased in percentage from 2015 and 2016, at 5.18%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
Vocabulary: Replace the words export, earnings, proportion, change, products, billion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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