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In some city’s, there are few controls over the design and construction of new homes and office building so people can build whatever they like. Do you think advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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people
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 financial status. In
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 city , the
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to
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 high .so they are planning
built
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a
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more
design
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 and
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thing
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in
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. The
people
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 class and upper middle class , they more conscious about
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plan
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. Because they know what they need.
initially
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plan
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concerned
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 department and got
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 approval . It was better to get approval to proceed
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concern
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verifying
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 design specifications
according to
that
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 area where the building going to
built
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people
are
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planned to
built
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well designed
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house
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showing
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 how wealthy we are . But they didn't
thinking
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future
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nessasity
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necessity
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spending
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to
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 much on that.
so
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 before planning something , need to think as much
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well trained
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 designer . So plan
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new
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 house or office some control measure is so important . It may not lead to any big accidents. It may ensure proper safety measures . My concern is specified team is
nessasary
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necessary
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design
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 of new construction.Because it could reduce
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might
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be happen
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 to some
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