Students are becoming more and more reliant on computers. What are some problems associated with reliance on computer and what are some of the possible solutions

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Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

centry
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country
century

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it
only
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is only

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Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

reliant on
computer
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computers

It seems that computer may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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and fune , so all I could say is a
siminsh
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similar

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to the
porblem
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problem

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not
Add the comma(s)
,not

It appears that you are missing a comma or two with the negative appositive the porblem not soloution. Consider adding the comma(s).

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Correct article usage
a soloution

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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soloution
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solution

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. let us say that the
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problem
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problem

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problme
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problem
is
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basically
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basically

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basicly
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basically
three first is
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healthy

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helthey
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health problems second

The words helthey problme secand seem to be misspelled. Consider replacing them.

problme
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problem
problems

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secand
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second

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is
phsicologec
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physiologic

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therd
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third
there

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socila
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social

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problem
fowrth
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fourth

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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