Bar graph shows the number of men and women college graduates

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bar graph shows the

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of both

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and

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from 1995 to 2015. Generally, the

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of

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are

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much higher than

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through the years. In 1995, around 37000

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graduated from

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, which is less than 6000

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of

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. But in 2005, the total

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of male

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increased much more than in 1995. The

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of male

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multiplied by 17000 that year to 60000.

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the proportion of

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extended by 3000, reached to 40000. In 2015, the total

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of

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increased even more, with male

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boosted dramatically than in previous years

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77000.

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, the

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of female

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also

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increased to 50000, but the

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is still much lower than the

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of male

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shown in that graph . In summary, the total

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of

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continuously increased

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the two decades, from 1995 to 2015.

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women

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lower

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than

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bar graph display.