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Some think that ambition is a good quality. Is it important to be ambitious? Is it a positive or negative characteristic? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#think #ambition #quality
In our,
life
 we need to achieve what we want we need to think about our
future
 and how we take our
ambition
. Always we need to think about how we reach our goal. In
this
 ,essay I will agree with the statement.
Firstly
, thinking
ambition
 in our
life
 is not
bad
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the
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is
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we have the courage to reach our dream. In
this
 world always you think about our
future
 with our family. We need to build the confidence to get that goal. If we do not think ahead of time about what we want in our
life
 our
future
 will mess up. And our
life
 will be miserable.
That is
 why important to think what is the best way to achieve all the goals that we dream
.
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However
, there
is
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 a lot of challenges to get what we desire in
life
. But ,
however
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 we need to do the right pathway.
Secondly
,
ambition
 has a negative way on people that they can not achieve what they want. In my, country there are some individuals depressed because of their situation and they can not fulfil their goals and which will cause anxiety.
Thus
 why we need to make a plan to get our goal and achieve the things that we want.
To conclude
,
ambition
 or
ambition
 have always a positive impact on our
life
 desition. So we can set a goal for our
future
 and get a better
life
.
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