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Today family members eat fewer meals together. What is your opinion on this?

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Undeniably, eating food with family members is crucial especially, in some cultures,
However
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, nowadays it become less likely for family individuals to sit together because of different numbers of factors. In
this
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 essay, we are going to discuss the reason that led to
this
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 phenomenon. First of all, the lifestyle of living has changed where people are chasing money, power, success, and a faster pace of life. so they are in an endless cycle of chasing in-which takes away from them the joy of involving in the simple details of life
such
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 as family gatherings, spending time with an old friend, meeting new people, and so on.
secondly
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, social media has the biggest impact on that where individuals prefer to spend most of their time scrolling on the phone,
the
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they

The word the doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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 become more familiar with the digital character they have created, and
living
Wrong verb form
live

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 within the digital form of life more
facinating
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fascinating

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for them other than their reality. in summary,
live
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life

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 has terrifyingly changed as it moves
forwords
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forwards
forward

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and a lot of our behaviours have
change
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changed

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 as well.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • societal changes
  • modern work schedules
  • individualism
  • technology's influence
  • foster
  • communication
  • fast-paced lifestyle
  • adverse effects
  • dietary health
  • social development
  • restoring
  • isolating effects
  • digital media
  • face-to-face interaction
  • strengthening family bonds
  • family cohesion
  • crucial element
  • societal health
  • policies
  • initiatives
  • traditional values
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