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You have eaten at a restaurant and it was such a terrible experience that you have decided to inform the manager by letter of what happened and that you want your money back

#restaurant #manager #money
To the manager I would like to express my regret at dining at your restaurant
last
 night; please allow me to explain. The table was booked two months in advance by my wife since it is going to be a family gathering and yet we were informed that there
was
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 no tables sufficiently large and we had to sit separately. As it was a family gathering after a long time, we
were suppose
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 to sit together and spend a whole night.
Moreover
, There was only bread in place of vegetarian so three of our
guest
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 had to leave the place without eating.
As a result
 of these incidents, I had indeed not to pay but your staff informed me that they will call the cop if I do so. That was really
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 embarrassing situation and I did not want it any
further
 , I complied
This
 expense is entirely unacceptable, and I would like to have a full refund of the amount I paid. regards paul hole
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