More developing countries are given aid from international organizations to help them in their development plans. Some people argue that financial aid is important but others suggest that practical aid and advice are more important? Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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More semi-developed
countries
receiving
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help from overseas organizations to improve their development aims. It is argued that helping with
money
is essential but others
claims
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that asking for
advices
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advice
pieces of advice
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and practical help
more
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is more
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essential.
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,
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receiving help financially is effective
in
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for
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short-term goals, l
belive
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believe
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that getting help with
advices
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advice
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and
practical
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practicals
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is more beneficial for long-term
goal
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goals
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. On the one hand, developing
countries
need cash
money
to improve themselves. In a short period of
time
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it is helping
to
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them a lot. But, as they are developing
countries
, most of the time they are not capable to invest
those
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that money
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money
efficiently.
That is
to say, they need to learn the
way
using
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money
in
a
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an
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effective
way
to improve their economy.
For example
, Turkey is
the
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one of the developing
countries
and when they have cash
money
from international organisations, they tend to use build higher buildings or invest
on
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in
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fields which is useless for
future
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the future
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of
nation
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the nation
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.
Therefore
, I believe that even
it
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if it
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is beneficial for
short-term
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the short-term
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, it is better to follow
latter
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thought. On
the
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apply
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another
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other
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hand, helping developing
countries
with
advices
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advice
pieces of advice
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and practices is
best
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the best
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way
to help them. It is better
teach
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to teach
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them
the
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apply
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how the fishing
instead
of
the
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apply
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giving
fish
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them fish
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. Using those
advices
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advice
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in a better
way
will improve
countries
'
life
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living
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standards and economy. Taking
example
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of developed
countries
and
try
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trying
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to imitate their practices will help them in
a
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the
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long-term
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long term
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.
For instance
,
Developed
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a Developed
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country namely Germany , is investing their population to improve their practical side and give them life-saving
advices
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advice
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to be
best
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the best
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in all fields.
As a
result
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they are producing nearly all engines in all sectors. I believe
this
school of thought is preferable because
,
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apply
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countries
need to understand long-term investments are more likely to help them to be developed
country
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countries
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. In conclusion,
although
getting help financially
saving
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saves
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today, l claim that receiving help as
a
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apply
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advice
pieces of advice
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advices
and
improve
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improving
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themselves in a practical
way
is more important for
countries
' fate.
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