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rich countries should aallow jobs for skilled and knowlegeable employers who are from poor coutries. Do you agree or disagree.

#countries #aallow #jobs #knowlegeable #employers #coutries
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The issue of whether
people
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 who live in poor
countries
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 with experienced skills and knowledge should be allowed to
work
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 in rich
countries
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 has long been controversial. In my opinion, it is good for a
country
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 to have
people
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 who are skilled in specific fields,
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 providing a competitive environment to society and in turn improving the quality of the
country
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. First of all, the concept of equalisation among races is well-known,
people
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 should not be discriminated against just because of the status of the
country
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. Everyone should be born equal, regardless of their
country
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's background, they are worth respected by others, especially when they are skilled and knowledgeable.
People
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 with experience do help the industry which required skills. Ideas can be exchanged among
countries
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 and in turn those
people
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 in which
countries
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 can gain new knowledge,
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 enhancing the quality of
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.
In addition
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, hiring
people
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 who came from poor
countries
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 helps companies to make more profits because of a relatively low salary. As there is a fact that, overseas' employees normally receive a lower payment compared with the local
people
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.
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, employing
people
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 who came from an undeveloped region not only can reduce the cost of operation,
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but it
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 can
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 increase the efficiency of
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 by recruiting more employees with a lower salary.
To conclude
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, under
this
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 line of thinking, there are benefits to employing
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 in poor
countries
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 to
work
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 for the riches.
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, rich
countries
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 have responsibilities to help the poor to get rid of their poor status.
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, I agree that rich
countries
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 should allow jobs for skilled and knowledgeable employers who come from poor
countries
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.
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