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Stores should sell local food products and not imported food products. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is often suggested that the market
tend
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 to sell domestic
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food stuff
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foodstuff
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 rather than
overseas
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an overseas
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 import. Personally, I completely disagree with
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 view for a variety of reasons.
To begin
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food
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 is very necessary.
This
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 means that it gives people access to more choices. In fact, imports make it possible to eat exotic fruits and vegetables that cannot be grown in one’s own country.
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, our country’s climate and land don’t allow growing all sorts of fruits and vegetables throughout the year, though, it is thanks to transported
food
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 products that we can have fresh comestibles anytime we desire.
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, when foods are being imported, their qualities are always checked and only the best products end up on our market.
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 is because if a supplier tries to sell low-quality
food
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, it will sooner be rejected. A newspaper “Economic Growth” in Vietnam indicated that in 2007, there were 2 big
food
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 companies
completely
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 went bankrupt
due to
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 their inhumanities, which was selling expired
food
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for
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 customers.
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, the market putting up
high quality
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food
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 for sale will get as many
as
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positive
feedbacks
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 for its customer and
therefore
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, the company’s reputation will be enhanced dramatically just because of those
feedbacks
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. In conclusion, It is undeniable that overseas
food
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 import is essential for economic growth and
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fulfil
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fulfill
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 the consumer demands
. .
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.
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 In my opinion, I disagree with the statement that suppliers should only exchange internal
food
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 products.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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