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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
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The line graph below gives information about
carbon
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dioxide
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(CO2)
emissions
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 per person in four different countries from 1967 to 2007.
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, Since 1967, we can see that
carbon
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dioxide
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emissions
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 in Italy and Portugal gradually increased until 2007.
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,
United
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the United
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 Kingdom and Sweden had a falling trend between 1977 and 2007.
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, even
the
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emissions
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 in
United
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 Kingdom reduced in the past 30 years, it still has the highest
carbon
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dioxide
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emissions
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. In 1967, the United Kingdom was the country which produced the highest
carbon
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dioxide
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(about 11 metric
tonnes
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). But in 1977, the
carbon
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dioxide
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emissions
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 in Sweden rose rapidly, almost
reached
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 the same level as the UK(around 10 metric
tonnes
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), but
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 sharply went down in 1987(around 7 metric
tonnes
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).
On the other hand
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, Portugal’s
emissions
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 rose greatly to about 5 metric
tonnes
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 in 2007. Meanwhile, Italy produced 7 metric
tonnes
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, which was more than Sweden in 1987, and went up to almost 8 metric
tonnes
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 in 2007.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words carbon, dioxide, emissions, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon dioxide emissions
  • per person
  • United Kingdom
  • Sweden
  • Italy
  • Portugal
  • graph
  • compare
  • average
  • increase
  • decrease
  • trend
  • peak
  • decline
  • years
  • period
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