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The table below gives information about the amount of beef exported in five different countries in 2012,2014 and 2016.

The table below gives information about the amount of beef exported in five different countries in 2012,2014 and 2016.
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The table gives information concerning quantities of
beefs
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beef
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slices of beef
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 exported in 5 countries in 2012, 2014 and 2016.
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,
it is clear that
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 Brazil exported more beef than
Japan
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, Switzerland, Norway, and Uruguay combined.
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, it is noticeable that
Japan
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's
exporting
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 almost quadrupled over the 4-year
period
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. Looking at the table more closely, one can see that
Japan
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 and Brazil showed an upward trend throughout the
period
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. Brazil ranks
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first
in
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 five countries, and
Japan
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 ranks
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third over the 4-year
period
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. Uruguay marked the second position in exporting beef throughout the
period
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,
represently
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representing
 44,372
tonnes
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 in 2012 and 42,310
tonnes
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 in 2016. It declined by about 5,000
tonnes
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 between 2012 and 2014, but it increased again by about roughly 3,000
tonnes
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.
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, Switzerland and Norway exported a fee
beefs
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 which were less than 100
tonnes
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 in the given
period
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. The figures
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 Switzerland and Norway went up and down for 4 years.
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